spreadmywings
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I've got to spread my wings I've gotta fly!
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Post by spreadmywings on Dec 3, 2005 19:40:50 GMT -5
Cut by a big knife Hurt and Pain fills the air Those words I heard will never let me forget, Forget what an idiot I was To trust her with my secrets, With my life Sorrow burrows deep beneath my skin ...to be continued
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Post by Vanya on Dec 4, 2005 17:19:52 GMT -5
Oy. Deep.
- 'fills' should be 'fill' since you are mentioning two things prior to that verb.
I wait for the continuation.
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spreadmywings
Writer
I've got to spread my wings I've gotta fly!
Posts: 51
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Post by spreadmywings on Dec 15, 2005 19:09:22 GMT -5
continued... To let him know the secret and ask the other Being rejected once again This betrayal is getting to far ahead I can't keep up, How will I survive? All this betrayal around and ahead of me... God! Let me get over these two betrayals! Let me forgive them and everyone! Please just let them not betray me again...
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Post by Vanya on Dec 23, 2005 14:33:49 GMT -5
Me likey. You're very... real with your writing. =)
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spreadmywings
Writer
I've got to spread my wings I've gotta fly!
Posts: 51
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Post by spreadmywings on Dec 23, 2005 16:23:49 GMT -5
down to earth? thanks. Would you believe I was very cranky when i wrote that?
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Post by Vanya on Dec 23, 2005 18:56:56 GMT -5
well it didn't sound cranky necessarily... but 'tis emotional. I can believe it. hehe.
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