spreadmywings
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I've got to spread my wings I've gotta fly!
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Post by spreadmywings on Nov 8, 2005 18:43:29 GMT -5
Divided Nation, We are one Divided Nation, We are loved Divided Nation, Seperated by religion Divided Nation, When will we be one? Divided Nation, Bloddy Wars Divided Nation, Death after death Divided Nation, Seperation of loved ones Divided Nation, When will it end? Divided Nation, We are one
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Post by Vanya on Nov 8, 2005 23:50:56 GMT -5
* Separation * Bloody Very good! I like the repetition, and even the capitization of Nation, while I would generally change it, works since there are only two words in the line anyway and it's repeated all the way through. I also like the paradox... divided, we are one... This reminds me a lot of Switchfoot... Just one thing: you say "we are one", and then you say "when will we be one?" I see why you said that but in context it doesn't really make sense. Actually the whole context doesn't make sense because of saying we are one and then saying we are separated. That's probably why it's a good poem.
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